Birdshot update

I've had another poke at Birdshot! The script can be found here (plain text, DOS format), and the version with extra bonus DVD playwright's commentary can be found here. Note new URLs: old links should still work, but might not forever. By the way, if you're thinking of making changes, the bare script is actually generated from the script-with-commentary, so it would make my life slightly easier if you make changes to that. But it's probably suboptimal for actual use. Anyway, here's the ( changelog (contains spoilers and techspeak) )

And here are some ( things I'm unhappy about (also contains spoilers) )

Now, this script-writing party I'm unable to come to: do you think there's any way that the read-throughs could be webcast? Does antoniabaker have Skype? Does she have an Internet connection at home? Could people email me new ideas reasonably frequently?